This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.
We have used the following criteria to guide us:
- Changing the word order of a sentence
- Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and personification
- Using specific verbs and adjectives
- Using show, don’t tell techniques
- Using different sentence beginnings and lengths
Here are some examples of my writing this term.
Show Don’t Tell - Emotions
Joy: I was so EXCITED that we won the rugby game even my rugby team never wins a game,we jumped and hugged and high fived and wahoed, my coach threw his sheets of paper in the air and flapped everywhere. we celebrated on the sideline. Every player was sweaty and red on the face.
anger: I was so angry with my mum, I couldn’t believe she came in the middle of my class, but even worse she called me sweetheart! When I got home I stormed to my room with anger.
Sad: I was so sad, getting bullied at school, not completing work. I felt like not going to school anymore. There were tears coming down my face and I slammed myself onto my bed.·
Writing to Music
Ps. I made up some words because this is another galaxy!
Once lived a old man. He was a great old person but also a King!
His name was King Long beard because of his long beard.he was a wise and rich. His castle was on a mountain. But their was a guy with a dark mysterious cloak. With turquoise skin, his name was Bongor . He wanted a hammer that the King has kept, It was so powerful it could blow up a planet. The king ruled a planet called Meric.
One day Bongor had flew to Meric. He flew dangerously to King Longbeards kingdom. He crashed at a tower smashing it to shreds. Landing on the broken tower base. He smashed through the door with no pain and He strolled down the corridor. Meanwhile King Longbeard slept like a sloth but not hanging upside down. On his throne, snoring. The he woke from a noise he heard from the dining room. He knew what was going on. He sent his assistant Mungo to warn the village and the knights and shining armor. Then Bongor furiously stormed into the room. “Our match has finally meet long beard!” yelled Bongor. Charging his sword towards the King. Longbeard swung his sword and fought for his life. Who will have life and who will have Death. Smashing their swords together. Until Bongor pushed him at the window. Bongor slowly walked up and swung his sword up dangerously above his head. Ramming his swords down towards him. Just as it was about to hit King Longbeard, he kick him out the window. Looking down. Bongor was falling when he smashed to the ground, dust flew under his black cloak.
Meric was saved by the king. Everyone celebrated all night, in the middle of the party the King had a speech…
Thank you,
Thankyou!
The town of Funju, I saved for our tribe and the planet . Coming to the party.
And also have fun!
So everyone partied and enjoyed the time. The town's dwarfs carved a statue of King Longbeard.
The end
The Boy
I was leaving the park sad & tired. I was getting bullied all the time. Slowly scuffing my feet as the gate shuts with a slam! A tear makes it way down my cheek and drops on the ground. All the money he has left was 50c he was crossing the pedestrian, BUZZ the light lit up green and I crossed. I was walking up the street with a thrown coming halfway down my face, I walked up my driveway and walked up the stairs and rang the bell with a big long sigh. My mum opened the door and let me in and it just started to rain. I slowly walked down the corridor and turned into my room. I sat gently against my bed and sobbed for a few minutes. My mum walked up into my room and asked what I bought from the parks shops. I gulped and lied: I got a pack of chips and a drink. And gave her the change. I didn’t like lying to mum. And she walked out.
Viking Girl
“Why do I have to do all the chores every time!!!”As I slammed the door and stomped my way into my bedroom, I slammed it so hard that it looked like it was going to fall of. I kicked all of my toys and threw my viking helmet on the floor, I ripped down the curtains. I was so Angry that I felt like I wanna run away, I looked in my mirror, under my eyes were bages so dark that it looked liked I drew under my eyes with vivid. I punched my mirror, the glass smashed all over the room.“Grace my darling.” I kicked my door open and stormed into the kitchen. “I’m not your DARLING!” I went to the sink to have a drink and and raced back to my bedroom. “Curse you mum” I thought to myself.
By Brayden
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